3/7/18

REJOICE, PEASANTS! // Of Broken Things and Paint Splatterings SNIPPETS

    
       Before this post officially starts can I just point out that putting "peasants" when addressing people is the best? It's effortless snark. 
 

 
      ANYWAYS, let's just hop right into the snippets!


     I've decided to spilt my book into three different POVs, Piper's, Josh's, and Alex's, all of which y'all will hopefully get to know better on my Friday posts. ^_^
 
      I have no snippets of Josh's POV for this post. :/

        Alex:  


          Austen takes his foot off of my face as a side door creaks open.
 “Can you jerks get lost?” A boy stands in the doorway, holding something over his shoulder. His expression is lost in the shadows, but his tone sounds annoyed.
 I hold my breath, waiting for one of the group’s response. 
 Ethan scoffs, “Go back to your demented grandma you-”
  I grimace at the racial slurs that tumble out of Ethan’s mouth.
 There is silence, and then the boy steps out into the alleyway, looming over Ethan, Gordan, and Austen.
         He’s older than I realized, looking more college age than high school age. One hand is curled into a fist, the other is armed with what looks like a sack of potatoes. The scowl growing across his dark face is terrifying.
He takes a step closer to Ethan, glaring down at him. “Do you want to see the bloodstains from the last person that called me or my grandmother that?” he asks, his voice strangely calm despite the furious expression on his face.
 
 
 
 
 

       
        “Andres!” 
         Andres turns, awkwardly waving at the old woman standing in the doorway. “Hi, Grandmother.”
         Grandmother taps her cane as she looks from me to Andres to me again, her frizzy white hair falls into her eyes, and her expression is unreadable. “Did you beat up this little white kid?” she asks, glaring at Andres.
“No, ma’am!” Andres throws up his hands, “I was saving him from those three punks.”
Andres’s grandmother stares at Andres, before a smile escapes her lips along with a giggle. “Did you use my bloodstain line?”
Andres grins back, “Worked like a charm.”
“That’s my boy.”

 
 
 
 


 
     Andres snorts, “Watch out, Alex, she’s sweet right now, but it’s all a trick.”             
     The girl sticks her tongue out at Andres, “Am not!”
   Andres sticks out his tongue right back, “You’re evil, May. The empress of evil."
  May sniffs, "I prefer The Most Amazing Queen and Sister, thank you very much."








Piper:

“Coward.” The moment the words leave my mouth I want to take them back, they hang in the air, suffocating me as Josh turns.
 The pain that spreads across his face is heartbreaking, and I suddenly know I was wrong, so horribly wrong. All I see in his eyes is grief. Years of rejection, anger, heartbreak, and of being desperately lost surface in his face, it’s like a tidal wave, rising, rising, rising. And then it crashes down.
 He turns, walking towards the door. “Sorry,” he whispers, breaking the silence.
"Josh.” I stumble forward, reaching for him. The room is spinning, the color is blinding and I feel bile rising in my throat.

  Josh keeps walking, closing the door softly behind him without looking back.







What is wrong with me? I can no longer see the color of anything. Everything is dull and fading. My paints turn muddy no matter what I do. Burying my face in my hands, I feel a lump growing in my throat. It’s over. I’ve won, but at the same time I’ve failed.
 
 

“You’re ridiculous.” Josh huffs, turning off the car and slipping the keys into his coat pocket. He turns to me, his dark brown eyes meeting mine, “You know, there’s a line between optimistic and stupid, right?” 

“Yes, it’s called hope.”

He unbuckles, reaching for the car door, “Hope is for the weak.” Josh steps out of the car, slamming the door, and I hurry to catch up to him as he walks across the parking lot.

“Aren’t you going to lock the door?” I ask.

He looks at me like I’m insane. “Why?”

I stare at him, is he really this…? I don’t even know what word to think of him as. “Someone might steal it…”
 
“Steal it?” Josh laughs, “If someone wanted to steal that rust bucket I’d be personally worried for their mental health and their eyesight.”
 

Soooo, yeah... *crickets*
What did you think?
 
Happy Writing,

 

37 comments:

  1. GRAY. THIS IS GENIUS.

    The mood blends...the beauty of Piper's side mixed with heartbreak, the humor and darkness of Alex's...

    I LOVE THIS. SO MUCH. <3

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  2. AAAAAHAAHAHHAHHAHHHHHHHHHHHH ASDFGHJKKL!!!!!!!!!!!!

    *composes self*

    *whisper chants* Jiper. Jiper. Jiper. Jiper.

    *fangirl mode engaged* GRAY YOU HAVE MADE MY DAY 1000000% BETTER!!! THESE SNIPPETS ARE GOLDEN!! YOUR CHARACTERS ARE GOLDEN. JOSH IS A CINNOMAN ROLL WHO NEEDS PROTECTION!!!!

    I CAN'T CONTAIN MY EXCITEMENT RIGHT NOW!!

    *composes self again*

    Okay... *takes a deep breath* *clears throat* I'm calm. But seriously, the world needs your book. And this is only from a few snippets.

    <3 <3 <3

    ~Ivie|Ivie Writes

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    1. Oh my gosh, thank you!!!!!!!!!! That means a lot. <3

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  3. These are amazing snippets, Gray!:) I love the one talking about paint splatters.
    -Quinley

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  4. All of these snippets are GOLD, Gray!!!! I can't wait to see more!

    Catherine

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  5. THESE ARE GOLDEN AND GORGEOUS AND I LOVE THEM.

    gray your writing truly is a gem to this world.

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  6. AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

    *tries to calm self down*

    This are amazing!! I can't wait to see more!!!!!!!!!!!

    Lilah

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  7. Lovely, thanks for sharing!
    I think I would have to say I loved Piper's POV the best.

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  8. "Did you use my bloodstain line?" That grandma is awesome. xD

    That bit about Piper and not being able to see the colours anymore... it's so sad when hopeful characters get crushed! (which is what I assume is happening there?) *pats Piper*

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    1. She is. XD

      It is sad, but *evil writer laughter* XD

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  9. Gray, if we are peasants then you.must be the Queen of Writing. Those snippets were 100% perfection. Ahhh, beautiful.

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  10. *dies in a puddle of feels*
    I loved loVED LOVED this!!! My interest is so piqued now. XD
    The grandmother tho—she's my new favorite character! Everyone needs a grandmother like that. XD

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  11. *deep breath* All right, Lila, listen closely. You are NOT going to start screaming at Gray to write this and publish this RIGHT NOW so you can read it, because GRAY IS AN AMAZING WRITER AND YOU CAN HARDLY WAIT. You are going to stay calm. *more deep breaths*

    Lila @ The Red-Hooded Writer

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    1. *dies laughing* This made my day, Lila. XD

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  12. I LOVE THIS, GRAY!!! <33333333333333

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  13. Aaaah this is sooo good!! Andres and his grandmother are so awesome XD

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  14. *realizes she hadn't commented on this yet*
    *faints*
    Why not, Snapper? Why have you neglected to comment.

    I'm ashamed of myself.

    BECAUSE GRAY YOU KNOW THIS IS EPIC.

    *goes and finds a Precious to keep me alive for 500 years so I can see watch the movie*

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    1. LOL! XD

      Thank you so much, Snapper!!! ^_^ <3

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  15. Finally, we get to meet them!!!! I love how you showed Piper's emotions with her paints. You've got an amazing story here!<3

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    1. Except for Josh, but yes!!! :D

      Thank you! <3

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  16. Dang, how much have you written this month? o.O

    And also, I think your snippets are really good. Keep it up, Gray!

    Reminds me of how I need to get writing myself, haha ^^

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    1. Not as much as I want to, but it's progress for sure! ^_^

      Thank you.

      Best of luck on your writing! <3

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  17. I look forward to reading this book in print. Your maturity as a writer astounds me! Well done!!!

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  18. GGGGGGRRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS!!!!!!! I think Josh is my favorite. But, Piper and Alex.... AAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!! <3<3<33333

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